This week I have been using a range of language features to help make my writing more descriptive. Some language features we have been talking about are similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia.
This is one of my favourite sentences from my writing this week The breeze blew on my back as the radiation from the sun was shining bright on my glimmering skin. I would love some feedback.Bye!!
Hi Vitaraag,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your sentence. You could possibly change the start of your sentence and describe the sun glimmering off beads of sweat. For example you could change the beginning of your sentence to say... 'A breeze blew across my back' and possibly say this is happening 'as the sun glimmered off beads of sweat falling to the ground.
From Miss Fortes